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BEC寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：留學(xué)推薦信怎么寫(xiě)
隨著個(gè)人的文明素養(yǎng)不斷提升，推薦信使用的情況越來(lái)越多，推薦信有不同的類別，不同類別的推薦信用于不同的情況和環(huán)境。那么問(wèn)題來(lái)了，到底應(yīng)如何寫(xiě)一份漂亮的推薦信呢？下面是小編為大家整理的BEC寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：留學(xué)推薦信怎么寫(xiě)，歡迎閱讀，希望大家能夠喜歡。
BEC寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：留學(xué)推薦信怎么寫(xiě)
首先一點(diǎn)，我們必須牢記，歸根結(jié)底，BEC作文考察的還是考生英語(yǔ)表達(dá)能力。所以學(xué)生并不需要擔(dān)心自己缺乏這方面的實(shí)際經(jīng)驗(yàn)是否會(huì)影響考場(chǎng)發(fā)揮。（順便提一句，BEC高級(jí)對(duì)商務(wù)知識(shí)的要求大大提高，因此考生要在語(yǔ)言功底上苦下功夫。比如說(shuō)，寫(xiě)商務(wù)報(bào)告的固定格式和用于必須牢記在心。）
與此同時(shí)，試題結(jié)合商務(wù)實(shí)戰(zhàn)的特點(diǎn)，要求文章必須包含特定信息點(diǎn)，或者是通過(guò)提供信息源，以及考題中的標(biāo)注，規(guī)定考生寫(xiě)作的具體范圍和內(nèi)容。所以審題是關(guān)鍵，所有已知條件都必須充分利用，換言之，如果遺漏已知條件，就會(huì)因信息表達(dá)不完整而導(dǎo)致失分。以下是對(duì)我的一名學(xué)員習(xí)文進(jìn)行點(diǎn)評(píng)。
PART ONEYou have been informed that next Wednesday your companys computer system will be closed down so that improvements can be made.Write an email to all staff in your department: saying what time on Wednesday the system will be closed down suggesting how staff should prepare for this saying how the system will be better after the improvements Write 40--50 words
學(xué)生作文：
From: Jenny XuTo: All StaffDate: 5 April 2009Subject: Computer SystemI want to tell you that our Intranet based on Linux will be closed next Wednesday at 10 o’clock.. I want to suggesting that you should save all your important documents. The computer system will be faster because we will use a newer SAP system. The new system is according to ISO900 and we will benefit from that.
作文解析：
BEC作文解答時(shí)，審題非常重要。題目中給出的要求就好比是解代數(shù)題中已知條件，都要用到。小作文處理的時(shí)候，大家不妨可以把每一個(gè)已知條件擴(kuò)寫(xiě)成一句句句子，同時(shí)兼顧句子之間的連接。
通常學(xué)生犯的錯(cuò)誤是：
1. 漏掉題中給出的已知條件。
2. 給出的已知條件沒(méi)有表達(dá)清楚，用詞過(guò)于口語(yǔ)化，沒(méi)有條理，暴露出語(yǔ)言功底薄弱。
3. 切忌過(guò)于花哨的發(fā)揮，多說(shuō)多錯(cuò)。
這篇學(xué)生的作品是比較典型的案例。作者有一定的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)能力和工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)，但文章中所暴露出來(lái)的不足也是明顯的。寫(xiě)作不能從細(xì)處下筆，而是先要搭建框架。以這篇習(xí)文為例，作者在具體語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)的雕琢上可圈可點(diǎn)，比如說(shuō)第一個(gè)句子中based on引導(dǎo)的過(guò)去分詞做后置定語(yǔ)，但是顯而忘記了這篇文章的主要目的，那就是通知同事公司電腦系統(tǒng)要升級(jí)，但update這個(gè)詞始終沒(méi)有在文章中出現(xiàn)，因此讀下來(lái)以后，可能同事還不是非常清楚，為什么computer system will be closed down, 盡管后面提到了improvement，總讓人覺(jué)得有些如鯁在咽，言之不盡；因此，思路不清晰是這篇習(xí)文最大的問(wèn)題
BEC寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：留學(xué)推薦信怎么寫(xiě)
1. 有些用詞過(guò)于口語(yǔ)化，比如說(shuō)，文章開(kāi)頭, I want to tell you, 文中you should save這樣的用語(yǔ)；
2. 建議Linux, 將SAP, ISO900等唬人術(shù)語(yǔ)統(tǒng)統(tǒng)除去，誠(chéng)然BEC涉及到基本的商務(wù)知識(shí)，但是真正考核的還是語(yǔ)言功底，語(yǔ)用能力；商務(wù)知識(shí)好比是蓋澆飯里面的小炒而已。
3.里面還有一個(gè)明顯的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，I want to suggesting….，當(dāng)然閱卷者不會(huì)刻意去搜尋語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，而是綜合考量語(yǔ)法得分，但由于小作文篇幅較短，那么這個(gè)錯(cuò)誤就顯得非常明顯。
范文：
Please be informed that our computer system will be closed next Wednesday at 12 oclock for system upgrade. The closure will last for at least two hours. Make sure that you have saved all your documents before that time. The whole system will run on a new server, much faster than the current one. PART TWOl You work for PJT Ltd, a manufacturing company. You need more staff in your department and your line manager has asked you to write a report explaining why.l Look at the information below, on which you have already made some handwritten notes.l Then, using all your handwritten notes, write your report.l Write 120-140 words.
學(xué)生作文：
The purpose of this report is to explain why we need more staff in our department.We compare the number of staff in our department between 2001 and 2003, it only increased five staff. But the average number of ordered units grow up from 200000 to 400000 between 2001 and 2003. Our sales department has announced a big new order from an international company recently. It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. That means that we have more workload and less working days.If we had more staff the order should be on time. We should save our company’s reputation. And the workflow will be improved.
作文解析：
BEC中級(jí)的大作文題型一般以寫(xiě)報(bào)告、書(shū)信為主，因此，這些必考問(wèn)題的具體格式必須掌握。英文商務(wù)報(bào)告的格式有五個(gè)部分組成，其中包括報(bào)告的Subject, Introduction (This report aims/sets out to……)，F(xiàn)indings (it was found that)， Conclusions(It was decided/agreed/felt that……)， Recommendations (It is suggested that…..) 括號(hào)中是每段開(kāi)頭固定的表達(dá)方式，考生不宜自己去創(chuàng)造。同樣寫(xiě)信也有格式化的表達(dá)方式，再此恕不展開(kāi)。 和第一部分一樣，大作文的寫(xiě)作審題是第一步，所有給出的已知條件必須用足。
本文中：
1.考生的習(xí)文字?jǐn)?shù)恰當(dāng)。但沒(méi)有把報(bào)告應(yīng)有的四個(gè)部分寫(xiě)完整，這將導(dǎo)致大量失分。 在以上的習(xí)文中，考生表現(xiàn)出了不錯(cuò)的語(yǔ)言駕馭能力。
2.在審題上還有一些欠缺，比如 Another reason for more staff is that we will have fewer delays. 在題目中給出的已知條件中，有一份客戶的投訴信件，應(yīng)當(dāng)作為佐證被引用，否則order should be on time無(wú)從談起。
3.除了沒(méi)有按照?qǐng)?bào)告的固定格式外，考生語(yǔ)言太隨意。比如說(shuō)，our sales department has announced a big new order，沒(méi)有出處，而根據(jù)文章中給出的已知條件，這是公司Newsletter所通告的，那么根據(jù)報(bào)告的要求，應(yīng)該指出信息來(lái)源。
4.中國(guó)學(xué)生還普遍特別敏感的就是企業(yè)的信譽(yù)，因此經(jīng)常會(huì)看到學(xué)生動(dòng)輒就是喊口號(hào)的語(yǔ)言，比如說(shuō)文中We should save our company’s reputation. 這樣空洞無(wú)物的話應(yīng)該避免。
5.還有就是細(xì)節(jié)處理，句子和段落之間連接忽略了。比如說(shuō)，It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. 以及最后一句話And the workflow will be improved.其中的and 這個(gè)詞用在這里顯隨意了些，可以考慮用Meanwhile 有“禍不單行”的意思。后面的And 應(yīng)該刪除。That means that we have more workload 這里兩個(gè)that離的太近，可以考慮把后面一個(gè)去掉，同時(shí)時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)該是we will have。
范文：
Report on: More staff in our departmentDate: 27.03.2004IntroductionThis report aims to explain why our department needs more staff.FindingsStatistics show that there exists a big gap between the number of staff in our department and staff workload. While the number of ordered units grew up from only 200000 to 400000 in 2 years, the number of staff grew only by 5 people. According to the Staff Newsletter dated February 2004, we have won a big new order from an international company. That will bring us more work. At the same time, annual holiday has been increased to 5 weeks per year, meaning there won’t be enough staff for all the work. Our customer service department recently received a complaint from one of our clients about a tremendous delay in our delivery. ConclusionThere are many reasons which explain the need of more staff. It is especially important for reducing the number of delays in delivery and to optimize the workflow.RecommendationsMore staff does not only mean more costs, it also means improved customer satisfaction.
BEC寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：留學(xué)推薦信怎么寫(xiě)
推薦信在留學(xué)申請(qǐng)中能起到的最重要的作用，就是以權(quán)威的身份來(lái)證實(shí)申請(qǐng)者在個(gè)人陳述或其它文件中所展示的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷、成就、素質(zhì)以及技能等等。
我國(guó)的留學(xué)申請(qǐng)者所提供的推薦信目前普遍存在以下問(wèn)題：
1.用盡所有表現(xiàn)人類美德、才華和優(yōu)秀的形容詞，卻沒(méi)有一個(gè)具體例證。我們都知道“事實(shí)勝于雄辯”，但我們給外國(guó)人看的推薦信上卻偏偏是反其道而行之。
2.總把申請(qǐng)者吹成一個(gè)大師，讓人難以置信。許多推薦人 “特別地欽佩” 他們的學(xué)生，“一輩子也沒(méi)有碰上這樣的天才”。
3.內(nèi)容千篇一律，讓人一看就是抄的。幾乎每一篇推薦信都有這樣的描述：課堂上所有別的學(xué)生都無(wú)法回答某個(gè)問(wèn)題，只有這位天才站起來(lái)侃侃而談，“顯示了深厚的功底和創(chuàng)造力�！� 可是沒(méi)有一位申請(qǐng)者說(shuō)得出來(lái)當(dāng)時(shí)到底談?wù)摰氖鞘裁丛掝}。
4.沒(méi)有正確地選擇推薦者。作為推薦者一般應(yīng)該具備如下幾個(gè)條件。一是必須要有比被推薦者更高職位或更多的學(xué)識(shí)，這樣才有能力和資格來(lái)評(píng)判被推薦者。另外一個(gè)必不可少的條件是，推薦者必須有機(jī)會(huì)了解被推薦者。所以合適的推薦人應(yīng)該是教過(guò)你或指導(dǎo)過(guò)你的教授，或者是工作單位中的頂頭上司。
5.寫(xiě)作時(shí)馬虎和草率。許多申請(qǐng)者一口氣給自己寫(xiě)三封推薦信(一般要求是三封)，然后讓三個(gè)教授簽字。這樣，不僅內(nèi)容相同、 語(yǔ)氣類似，用詞也差不多，甚至語(yǔ)法和拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤也一模一樣，更有甚者，打印的字體也是分毫不差。
推薦信的評(píng)改
下面通過(guò)對(duì)幾篇推薦信中的段落的評(píng)論來(lái)進(jìn)一步地闡述好的推薦信應(yīng)該怎么寫(xiě)。
Miss Ruanjian is now working under my immediate supervision in the Engineering Department of the Heavy-duty Equipment Co, Ltd. Ruanjian has proved to be of invaluable assistance in adapting our international corporate operating system to clear the hurdles of relatively undeveloped Chinese market conditions.
One of Ruanjian’s greatest contributions is in the adaptation and modification of our integrated IBC (Industrial Boiler Control) software. The rigidity of the program structure had often led to complications in our relations with our clients. She was able to work with both the program and with our clients to smooth points of friction and eventually satisfy our clients. Subsequently, she has succeeded in adapting our program to avoid such further instances. She learns from mistakes and quickly takes steps to avoid them in the future.
評(píng)論：
我們一般在第一段就要說(shuō)清楚推薦人與被推薦人的關(guān)系、雙方各處于什么職位。如果被推薦人是推薦人的雇員或者合作伙伴，應(yīng)該說(shuō)明被推薦人的職位以及工作職責(zé)，也可以概括一下被推薦人所做的一些重點(diǎn)項(xiàng)目。最后也可以用一句話總體評(píng)價(jià)一下被推薦人。
本文雖然只選了兩段，但已經(jīng)是推薦信的主要內(nèi)容了。在這篇推薦信里，推薦人并沒(méi)有使用太多的形容詞，只是讓事實(shí)本身說(shuō)話。被推薦人“軟件小姐”在公司里銷售與重工業(yè)設(shè)備配套的軟件。因?yàn)槊恳粋�(gè)單位的設(shè)施不盡相同，因此經(jīng)常需要對(duì)軟件產(chǎn)品作適當(dāng)?shù)恼{(diào)整，并且與申請(qǐng)者進(jìn)行充分的溝通�！败浖〗恪狈浅偃芜@項(xiàng)工作，并且有能力從以往的錯(cuò)誤中總結(jié)經(jīng)驗(yàn)，指導(dǎo)今后的銷售工作。雖然敘述的事情不多，但非常具體、真實(shí)，連軟件的名稱和用處都予以了說(shuō)明。這樣的推薦信通過(guò)事例來(lái)說(shuō)明一個(gè)人的經(jīng)歷和能力，盡管簡(jiǎn)短卻要言不煩，非常有效。
At this water plant, she has consistently demonstrated a keen mind and impeccable work ethics. She started working as my assistant when I was conducting research on the application of the fiber filtering technology to the treatment of drinking water, which is traditionally treated with sodium silicate. My research represented the first attempt at applying the fiber filtering technology outside the realm of industrial wastewater treatment.
Ms. Du stopped at nothing in her effort to learn. She quickly learned to operate all the equipment and devices skillfully. When the plant completed converting the old filters into fast-filters, she seized the occasion as a good opportunity for her to practice what she had learned. Assigned to test the quality of the water flowing out of the new filters, she had to do protracted data recording to find out the functioning of the new filters under different conditions. Undeterred by the monotony of the job, she discharged her duties with great patience and meticulous care.
評(píng)論：
在接下來(lái)的段落中，要通過(guò)具體事例對(duì)被推薦人進(jìn)行多方面的評(píng)價(jià)。如被推薦人的知識(shí)、興趣、能力、性格、社會(huì)技能、與同事同學(xué)的關(guān)系等等，推薦人應(yīng)該很客觀的進(jìn)行評(píng)論，這樣才能幫助被推薦人。切記，一定要重點(diǎn)推薦被推薦人是否具備其所要申請(qǐng)的專業(yè)應(yīng)該具備的素質(zhì)。
以上這封推薦信介紹了學(xué)環(huán)境工程的杜女士在工作上的表現(xiàn)，她的工作是配合研制水凈化設(shè)備。本文沒(méi)有像許多申請(qǐng)者那樣把一個(gè)剛出道的年輕工程師吹捧成一個(gè)大師， “獨(dú)立承擔(dān)著”某項(xiàng)劃時(shí)代的科研項(xiàng)目，而是恰如其分地介紹了杜女士在工作的初期還在繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)，她在這段培訓(xùn)過(guò)程中十分地刻苦，工作十分細(xì)致，出色地完成了非�？菰锏摹⒅貜�(fù)性的數(shù)據(jù)記錄工作。
其實(shí)國(guó)外任何指導(dǎo)實(shí)驗(yàn)的教授都知道，一個(gè)研究生剛畢業(yè)到了研究部門(mén)只能是做些輔助的工作，所以杜女士擁有這樣的經(jīng)歷已經(jīng)足以說(shuō)明其素質(zhì)和能力了。所以在推薦信中，切忌不切實(shí)際地瞎吹。否則，就會(huì)弄巧成拙，反而會(huì)起到反效果。
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